Idea is cute, but story is too rushed, also on ritsu's past he is way too bold, as well as not cautios, he left home with a guy he didn't know, let him know where he lives,.. than guy stalks him to university, he lets him touch him where his past is still hunting him, saying ''I love you'' in 24h, it's not a good plot. Best stories are make believe stories, where characters are true to them selves and build up the relationship, actions and plot tensions, Masamune comes here of as some horny creep and nothing else, and ritsu litteraly as a victim whore of his past. It's sad to read it with such pace. Masamune should prove himself to him, be rejected few times. Only non OOC character here is Kisa, maybe Saeki. everyone else seem original charaters with known names. *just an observation*

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